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Post by Deleted on Oct 7, 2015 4:27:52 GMT
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Post by Plush Ramen on Oct 8, 2015 3:27:06 GMT
Hello and welcome to the forum! While I admire your passion to roleplay and character build up, there are a few things I must point out to you on here. For you to come close to the approval process, some work will need to be done.
- Grammar check. Please reread over your history and try to focus on each sentence at hand. To me, it looks like not a whole lot of description went into trying to describe his back story. Flesh it out.
- Second. I'm not quite understanding his split personality. Is that it? or is it like some sort of creature possessing him? For his cutie mark to mean that hes never able to be a good soul for long just doesn't make sense. Please explain further. With Nightmare's occurring, is it a Nightmare Moon thing?
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